Wednesday, 22 November 2017
100 word challenge week #11
The man was an old villager who once lived. This mysterious figure was a hero in the 1800s. The helper of the poor, would bake bread for everybody in town. Then one day the village people honoured him for his generosity by making him a black robe. He fought in wars, help medics in the hospital he would comfort family members that had lost an member. After his service years in war. Then man would continue his passion for caring for others. Later on his long loved life. The mysterious man passed away from sickens. The village people admired him and decided to build a statue of him. Now he rests between two trees of hope.
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
Hello Bigdream6,
ReplyDeleteYou have used some interesting vocabulary e.g. 'generosity' and 'admired', which helps make your writing more enjoyable to read. I appreciate how you have included a variety of sentence lengths, as this was part of today’s lesson, but you have two incomplete sentences; they start with "After" and "Later". You would benefit from word processing your story in a 'Word' document first, then copying and pasting it into your blog. 'Word' will help you realize where you have made spelling and grammar mistakes. Keep on writing and improving.
Sincerely,
Mrs. Van